Below is a bio which is pretty much  a poster child for rejection. All comment by Q are in black italics, and the Neo comments are in blue italics. Read well and learn this is what _not_ to do if you want to get accepted.

Neo: Its amazing what people send us. Let me just start off by saying no "can I please please please please join your rpg! Its so great! PLZZZ!!!11!". There is a form. Use it. Anyways-Let the show begin!!

PLAYER INFO
Name:  Emilio
Email:  *Removed for anonymity*
AIM/ICQ:
RPG Experiance:  ezboard
Sailor moon Knowledge:  i have seen sailor moon and sailor moon r parts 1+2
Q: ok...One usually capitalizes  the begining of sentances, names and titles, like "Sailor Moon". also, "and" is three letters, is it really that much of an inconvenience to type "and"?
Neo: *starts singing* "Ya stoopid girl- ya stoopid girl- all you had you waisted!"

Webpage:
How did you hear of the AsylumRPG?: ring of power
CHARACTER INFO
Character You're applying for:  fan shensi
Q:It's "Senshi", Spell checker is your friend. Also, the rule's explicitly state that one cannot apply for a fan senshi without first or simultaneously applying for one of Naoko's senshi.
Neo: Is reading the rules hard?I mean...2 minutes at most. Cmon!

Senshi name:  Sailor Ruby

Q:This is the japanese series, therefor it would be "SailorRuby"

Civilian name: Emilio Kisaragi
Age: 12

Neo: Dude. The player and RP char have the same name. This isn't bad- I just noticed it.

Birthday: 31st july
Sign:  leo

Q:Isn't that Usagi and Chibiusa's birthday? Coincidence is fine and all, but...well..just keep reading.

SENSHI APPERANCE
Eyes:  Green
Hair:  purple
Hight:  4' 6"
General appearance: Serena, but smaller, with purple hair.

Q: NO! Please, for the love of Gods do not do this! Neo and I put a lot of work into creating the characters for Asylum, and all of them are quite original, We encourage creativity, not cop off
Neo: Please be descriptive! Purple hair, green eyes- I mean come on! how many shades of green and purple are there? Is their hair a velvety purple or candycane pepperment green? Mold green? Is there flecks of yellow or maybe blue? How long is the hair? What is the style? Is it extremely silky? Oily? Dry? Think of the tree senses when you describe the character! Are they tanned or freckled?Whats their build? Lanky, muscular, toned, pudge? This shows your descriptive writing skills here people.

THE BASICS
Talents:  Martial arts
Inabilites:  not much

Q: She's perfect? a mary sue character. Great. Look, no one's perfect. Not even SuperSailorNeptune, which is why she's dead. There's always something someone cant do. How bout "Pee standing up because she's a girl"?
Neo: People are like coins. A good side a bad side. Can a 12 year old fly a airplane or shoot a ballow 500 miles away? Exactly! Be realistic.

Future dream:  to be one of the most powerful shensi like sailor mars

Q: Mars is not the most powerful senshi. I won't even mention the lack of capitalization here. But I will point out that they misspelled Senshi again.
Neo: *sings*"You stoopid giirl- ya stoopid giirl- I can't believe ya fake it". I thought Sailormoon was the most powerful senshi- ya know with the ginzoushou and all. But hey- me, millions of fans and Naoko could be wrong. Maybe rewritting it to "Idolizes Mars and her inner strength and power to fight evil with a determination that sets all ablaze so much she wishes to be exactly like her. In essence hoping to become a personal senshi to the Queen and protector of the ginzoushou; thusly imbolizing all evil where it stands and defeating the Asylum". Waaait- thats right! The Asylum is the bad guys in this one. Could it be we're at war? *smacks someone* NAH!

Goals/pourpose: to get a boyfreind!!!!

Q: Here goes my rant. The king, and two other senshi are dead, another is MIA. I highly think getting a boyfriend is your whole pourpose in life. The world's at war, and these are very dark times. Being shallow is BAD! Now, I don't object the idea in theory, but maybe it could have been worded better? "Ruby is looking for someone to share her life with. In the middle of all these dark times, it would be a wonderful thing to find something tangible to fight for." Cliché, I know, but Cliché is better then shallowness.
Neo: Ye said it Q.

Friends: No-one, she is new to town

Q:Fair enough.
Neo: I think this is the only part that makes sense. I'm assuming she's from a different planet or part of the world- but we don't know that do we. DO WE? NO!

Foes: negaverse

Q:Again, we're doing the Japanese version. The "negaverse" would be the "Dark Moon Kingdom" and they're dead Anyways.
Neo: *has to laugh everytime she reads this on a char sheet*......ah.....people just don't READ!

Inner personality:  shy
Neo: Kaay.....why? How? Does she run away whenever theres someone near her? Or is it crowds she's afraid of? What makes her stomach clench or insides burn? What goes on inside her head?? Tense the words "inner personality"

SENSHI
Element:  Fire
Talismen/weapon: ruby necklace
Henshin:  eh? what does that mean?

Q: Our bad. We got alot of questions about that one, and it's fixed now. What we meant was "Transformation object"

Transformation phraze: ruby fire crystal
Strength:  martial arts
Weakness:  she is still only young

Q:So was Chibimoon..and ChibiChibi...
Neo: Wow....12 and in martial arts AND good at everything. She's some kind of super child. I WANT ONE! Geez. Even Sailormoon who was the most powerful of the senshi had a weakness: she was a glutton, a clutz, a blonde and fell in love with Mamoru...hrmmm. Think much?

History: She is a quiet girl who met a purple cat one day when she was 9, who enhanced her grandmother's ruby necklace itno a transformation item. she does not beleive she is a real shensi, as she has not yet leant to fully ocntrol her powers.

Q: Some more in depth would be nice. What about before She found the cat? where did she live? were her parents alive? did she have siblings? what school did she attend. make the character come to life!
Neo: Did anyone die? How did the death of Endymion and the Earth affect her? Something! Anything! *head meets desk*

ATTACKS
Q: Describe them, how they look, what movements she does to cast the power, ect. Also, the fire scroll sounds very...Mars. as does the Phoenix.
Neo: Cute- how people expect us to read their minds. Hrmm *rubs temples* I see- a lack of- SailorRuby in the rpg! *blinks* Ah! I'm right!

Attack one: Ruby crystal flame.

 Attack two: Ruby fire scroll surround

Attack three: Ruby Phoenix Flight
 

Extra details: She has a pet cat called Emerald
Neo: Hrm. I can see there not being much here because she's so young...but ya know...it doesn't hurt to give some freak'n three dimensionalism to the character. C'mon- live a little! ^^

Q: Yes, you're not missing something. this person forgot- or was too lazy, to fill out the writing sample. If you want to be guaranteed a tossed out application, this is the way to go. Be sure to fill out the writing sample.
Neo: Heehee Funnee girly. No strikes here peeps- we won't write you back; we'll just delete your character sheet no time flat! So please- read the webpage! I_can't_stress_this_enough

Q: This Bio was sent in before we had the pop quiz, thus, it's not done on this application.
Neo: Mind you- if you didn't do the quiz for the character sheet we'd delete you lickity split. We've a low tolerance with forgetting the writing sample and quiz. Its basically like saying "Pfft! I don't care". We don't care if you have a awesome sheet- you HAVE to do the Quiz (as well as the writing sample). Tho we may seem harsh- if you some how by gods knows what do a awesome character write up but befungle the quiz- you will be majorly in our favour and we will simple fill you in on what you for gods, lords and flying monkeylys missed.